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he told her once that her eyes
were burned out galaxies
the light in them
already dead but fading
fading slowly
and that her pupils
were like black holes
liable to pull
you in and never
never let go.

and all she said was
we are all just dead
dead stars in the end.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:+fav:

hi! i hope you don't mind my humble feature:
your lovely piece is handpicked. (link)

thank you.
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candlelions Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
ack!~ thank you so much! :heart:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you too. this is for you: :iconflowersplz:
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Lil-Muse Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Pretty bittersweet :heart:
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AnaInTheStars Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Professional Writer
very pretty and deep...I like the imagery the words portrays...only thing it's missing is punctuation
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Take the 'like' out of the second line and make it a metaphor. It'll have much more impact.

Overall though, a cool poem. There was a chill running down my back as I read it.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the last stanza made this for me.

great piece.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous, and really quite chilling. I love that last, small stanza; it's made all the more spooky by its isolation from the rest of the piece. Great work! :D
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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candlelions Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
whoa whoa whoa. WHAT?
THANK YOU.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
You're welcome.
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Another-Hitchhiker Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012   Writer
This is an exquisite poem -- fantastic work. :heart:
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atlantic-lungs Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Just beautiful, i agree the use of black holes was done perfectly.
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Wistful-Night Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I've always wanted to do something about pupils being like black holes, but never could get it to sound right. You pulled it off brilliantly, and made a beautiful poem to boot.
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candlelions Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
*rolls across floor, flailing arms*

thank you ;-;
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LadyOfSilver Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This actually gave me chills. I loved it, it was so mysterious and melancholic. Just beautiful! :D
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candlelions Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! :heart:
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